This is what I have so far.... so what would make a good theseis and introduction for this?Thank you so much)?

Woolly mammoths roamed the earth about 2 million to 9,000 years go during the ice age.

These animals were large with long, brown, thick fur. They had two tusks that were used to clear snow out of their way much as a shovel is used. These tusks could grow to be as long as 16 feet. They also had short ears that only reached an average of 3 feet. Most mammoths died out at the end of the last ice age, whether the general mammoth population died our for climatic reasons or due to over hunting by humans is controversial. Another theory suggests that mammoths may have fallen victim to an infectious disease.

New data derived from studies done on living elephants and reported by the American institute of biological science suggest that although human hunting may not have been the primary cause toward the mammoths final extinction, human hunting was likely a strong contributing factor.

Biological sciences also notes that bones of dead elephants, left on the ground tend to bear marks
This is what I have so far.... so what would make a good theseis and introduction for this?Thank you so much)?
For your thesis you need to take a position. Since the research is ambiguous, you can waffle a little. Perhaps something like:



"Humans played an important role in the extinction of ice age mammoths."



Then your introduction can start with the information supporting that view:



"New data derived from studies done on living elephants and reported by the American institute of biological science suggest that although human hunting may not have been the primary cause toward the mammoths final extinction, human hunting was likely a strong contributing factor.

Biological sciences also notes that bones of dead elephants, left on the ground tend to bear marks..."



Hope that's helpful. Good luck.
Reply:oh wow. i sure hope this isnt ur final essay. it jumps all over the place. try paragraphs!!! each with a topic and concluding sentence. and try transitional sentences and words to help ur paper flow more smoothly. ur thesis should be exactly what ur talking about in ur paper. in this case i am going to assume its the physical description and the description of the extinction of the woolly mammoth. in fact u could probably get away with using what i just said about the physical description and stuff, but make sure u fix the parallelism problems. be sure to put ur thesis at the end of ur intro paragraph too. it helps the reader focus in on what ur going to talk about. start ur intro with an attention grabber then transition to what ur going to talk about. im not going to write it for u though u are welcome to use what i used earlier. i hope that helps :D
Reply:Woolly mammoths roamed the earth about 2 million to 9,000 years ago during the ice age. The physical characteristics of these animals were their thick fur which was necessary for survival when the temperature was constantly below freezing. the mammoths tusks, similar to the modern day elephant's who is an ancestor of the mammoth, were used for defense against other more aggressive animals. the tusks doubled as a kind of shovel for the mammoth, moving snow out of its path. each tusk could grow to be as long as 16 feet.







sorry im too lazy to do the rest but i think the rest is pretty good :P i wouldnt have done much to it, just reword it.